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Hole in a Soul

I've been taking lots of advice from Connor and Dean over the past week to try and get my writing up to OSW par. Please can I have some feedback on my first attempt proper?

This is an OSW promo. I'm glad you've taken the advice you've been given and utilized it. I really enjoyed this as an introductory piece to the character, and I'm excited to see more. I think you will get along better with Gravedigger than you did with Master Ken. Keep hearing out the boys on whatever advice they may have from here, but it looks to me like you're starting to get it!

I like that you made it very apparent how loyal Gravedigger is to Tombstone. I enjoyed the concept behind why he digs graves and what was said to him when he was found. How he's digging to try and fill the void left behind of his former self.

I'll be looking forward to seeing how you progress from here, buddy.

This is MUCH more in line with other promos here. Great work. I can already see you taking into account that feedback you mentioned. I really liked getting to know Gravedigger a little bit here. You introduced your concept, applied it to your opponent, then drove home why you will succeed.  Can't ask for much more than that.

I'm not really going to be critical here, as this is your first attempt with this character. You're going to write more of these, and every time you do, you'll find more of your voice, and more of the little things that make your writing yours.

Keep it up. I look forward to seeing where you are in a few months.

This was a very nice introduction promo, man. I dug (pun not intended) the Raven like voice you used for this character and the use of the hole filling metaphor worked well against Felix. I especially like how he gushes about Tombstone in this piece. Dude wants so much to be loved since he never knew his parents, and I hope for his sake that he gets something from the monster that resembles compassion.

Keep at it with Dean and Connor, and you'll eventually start racking up wins left and right.

I echo everything here. A big part of the characters ongoing personality is his deep love for Tombstone and this came across beautifully in this promo. The development of the character, his backstory and the connection to Felix and his past made this a phenomenal promo.

I'm keen to see what you do from here on out. I'm loving this character and I think you'll enjoy this a lot more.

Thats a really good piece.

I think you have already written your best promo in OSW with your first one as Gravedigger, keep up the good work :).

This is a really good promo mate. It's got all the right kind of things in it and is a really good step for you.

I think you're doing really well taking in the advice Dean and Connor are giving you.

You're using a theme to carry your voice forward, relating that concept to your character and unpacking it relating to your match and storyline - it's a great blueprint to base your character from.

I love the voice and mentality of Gravedigger you use here.

I think if you keep looking at promos that are placing in top 3, keep taking on that advice and homing the style you write with, this character can be really strong for you.

Keep it up man